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viagrandad
viagrandad

shounen-ai/yaoi set in all boys private school
main boy is the obligatory mysterious transfer student that amasses a manslut harem
twist is that he is really a reverse trap and wanted to attend the school for academic reasons
series revolves around reverse trap continuing her fake romance with the mansluts in order to prevent them from blowing her cover

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TurtleCat
TurtleCat

@viagrandad
BOY FALLS IN LOVE WITH GIRL

Dreamworx
Dreamworx

@TurtleCat
UNABLE TO CONFESS, HE IS GIFTED BY DEUS EX MACHINA WITH THE GIRL'S PHONE NUMBER.

Stark_Naked
Stark_Naked

@Dreamworx
NEVER MINDING THE STRANGE AREA CODE, HE IMMEDIATELY CALLS HER

Snarelure
Snarelure

@Stark_Naked
SUDDENLY THE PHONE EXPLODES AND THE BOY IS KILLED.
HE WAKES UP AS A GHOST AND TRIES TO HELP THE GIRL FROM AN ALTERNATE UNIVERSE CONFESS TO HIMSELF FROM AN ALTERNATE UNIVERSE.
GHOST-AI

Lord_Tryzalot
Lord_Tryzalot

@Snarelure
C-C-C-COMBO BREAKER

Poker_Star
Poker_Star

@Snarelure
WOULD STILL WATCH

Spazyfool
Spazyfool

@Snarelure
Literally just this.

Need_TLC
Need_TLC

Slice of life ser in post nuclear bomb Hiroahima

CouchChiller
CouchChiller

@viagrandad
A girl falls in love with a boy.

Unable to confess, she is called up by another boy who has a huge crush on her. Never minding how she'd usually never talk to this loser, she decides to chew him out and is surprised to find the boy is annoyed of her (supposed) overbearing crush on him as well.

But, the next day, when she recounts the previous day's confessions to the boy, he only looks at her with a broken heart. After some investigation, she finds out that the boy who called her is not the same boy who has a crush on her. In fact, he doesn't exist in this universe at all. He is his counterpart from an alternate universe. where the girl instead has a crush on him.

Drama ensues as the two strike up a deal to try give each other their most hated turn-offs in order to try stop their counterparts trying to win their love. While the two repel their respective suitors, HIJINX ensue as their attempts to repel each other back fire instead and question the NATURE of ATTRACTION.

eGremlin
eGremlin

@viagrandad
Romance.
Straight twincest.
Yuri romance.
Drama.

Is this really so much to ask for in a story. It will never be done.

Illusionz
Illusionz

@TurtleCat
Threadly reminder that you should stop posting that because it's a thing.

https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3206139/1/

TurtleCat
TurtleCat

Girl becomes idol.
She gets popular.
Too popular.
She becomes an Amahitogami.

Follow the wacky adventures of a girl who just want to be normal,but her divine powers don't let her!

kizzmybutt
kizzmybutt

A selfie stick is actually a time machine.

Fried_Sushi
Fried_Sushi

I notice that a lot of Japanese animes have an element of things being summoned by kids to do battles. So Marvel Disk Wars, Pokemon, Digimon, Beyblade, Yu Gi Oh, Fate, etc. And I notice Japan is lacking in cultural sensitivity. So I invented a new anime idea.

The anime is called "Trigger Nigger" (トリガーニガー [Torigānigā]), and it is about a Japanese school boy called Luther, who on his 6th birthday gets gifted a G.A.T (Gun of African Teleportation). This revolver like device contains six chambers, each chamber can hold a 'BULIT' (Black Undead Low-calibre Instantaneous Teleporter). These BULITs contain the spirits of black people throughout time and space. They may just be common ones, like Tyrone who lives in Atlanta or Bongani the Zulu. But the powerful ones that the protagonists seek are famous ones like Steve Urkel, DMX, Malcolm X, Precious, Al Jolson, Queen Latifah, Trayvon Martin, Oprah Winfrey, Tupac, Biggie, Benjamin Sisko etc.

The main arc follows Luther and his friends as Luther tries to become the ultimate Triggermeister. In this it's sort of like Pokemon, with Luther acquiring new BULITs and battling other Triggermeisters. The primary antagonist is Nathaniel Ahmed Alan Charles Paton (also known as NaAcP). His goal is to amass all the BULITs in the world, and trigger them at once, completely destroying mankind with the equivalent of a billion LA Riots all over the world. Luther and his pals will confront NaAcP frequently, as the series progresses.

The opening theme is New Slaves by Kanye West, but covered by SNSD.
The closing theme is Missing You by Sean "Puff Daddy" Combs.

Anyway, any ideas for how I could tweak it? Any suggestions to improve it? I reckon it could be the best shonen anime, as it mixes the great music of hip hop, with fascinating black culture, and with the always popular 'monster battler' format of show.

likme
likme

@Fried_Sushi
トリガーニガー

Cool title

Firespawn
Firespawn

@Fried_Sushi
But a bunch of those black people aren't even dead

farquit
farquit

@viagrandad
so...ouran.

alright.

w8t4u
w8t4u

@Fried_Sushi
トリガーニガー [Torigānigā]

Seems legit.

Lord_Tryzalot
Lord_Tryzalot

@farquit
Ouran wasn't all-boys though

SomethingNew
SomethingNew

@Lord_Tryzalot
duh

but its still basically ouran

Deadlyinx
Deadlyinx

@CouchChiller
And its title is Kir-Ai

Firespawn
Firespawn

@Fried_Sushi
Disregard this, I suck cocks.

I notice that a lot of Japanese animes have an element of things being summoned by kids to do battles. So Marvel Disk Wars, Pokemon, Digimon, Beyblade, Yu Gi Oh, etc. And I notice Japan is lacking in cultural sensitivity. So I invented a new anime idea.

The anime is called "Trigger Nigger" (トリガーニガー [Torigānigā]), and it is about a Japanese school boy called Luther, who on his 6th birthday gets gifted a G.A.T (Gun of African Teleportation). This revolver like device contains six chambers, each chamber can hold a 'BULIT' (Black Undead Low-calibre Instantaneous Teleporter). These BULITs contain the spirits of black people throughout time and space. They may just be common ones, like Tyrone who lives in Atlanta or Bongani the Zulu. But the powerful ones that the protagonists seek are famous ones like Steve Urkel, DMX, Malcolm X, Precious, Al Jolson, Queen Latifah, Trayvon Martin, Oprah Winfrey, Tupac, Biggie, Benjamin Sisko etc.

The main arc follows Luther and his friends as Luther tries to become the ultimate Triggermeister. In this it's sort of like Pokemon, with Luther acquiring new BULITs and battling other Triggermeisters. The primary antagonist is Nathaniel Ahmed Alan Charles Paton (also known as NaAcP). His goal is to amass all the BULITs in the world, and trigger them at once, completely destroying mankind with the equivalent of a billion LA Riots all over the world. Luther and his pals will confront NaAcP frequently, as the series progresses.

The opening theme is New Slaves by Kanye West, but covered by SNSD.
The closing theme is Missing You by Sean "Puff Daddy" Combs.

Anyway, any ideas for how I could tweak it? Any suggestions to improve it? I reckon it could be the best shonen anime, as it mixes the great music of hip hop, with fascinating black culture, and with the always popular 'monster battler' format of show.

SomethingNew
SomethingNew

@viagrandad
Kights of Sidonia with bees.

Each week a new natural predator tries to attack the hive

worker bees must sortie to save the colony and the queen

bee themed nationalism along with biology lessons

final episode of episode 1, the bees face a human child

first episode of season 2, human child alerts adults that there's a beehive near the house

season 2 has the bees try to stop the human menace trying to destroy them

Sometime in the middle of season 2 the queen is hurt in an attack by humans forcing the workers to nurture an emergency queen

season 2 ends on a cliffhanger as they are finally thwarted and their colony gets destroyed, with only a few workers (MB(main bee) included).

Season 3 follows their attempt to start a new colony from scratch.

WebTool
WebTool

@Fried_Sushi
@Firespawn
I think I read something like that but with a girl and Jay-Z (for the token series mascot) together doing magical girl things along the lines of Card Captor Sakura.

Deadlyinx
Deadlyinx

An anime following the adventures of the wu-tang clan in early 90's new york.

Lord_Tryzalot
Lord_Tryzalot

@Deadlyinx
get this shit written out and sell it user

the world needs this

what will it be called? maybe just 36 Chambers? each episode could be named after a different track. :D

LuckyDusty
LuckyDusty

@Firespawn
You should make a tumblr account and start writing it as a webcomic

But pretend to be japanese

MPmaster
MPmaster

@Lord_Tryzalot
Yeah, 36 chambers sounds good.

The first episode would be called "enter the 36 chambers" and the last "a better tommorow".

The action would be mostly based on their lives before the release of 36 chambers.

Soundtrack by RZA.

Animation by Gainax.

Snarelure
Snarelure

After WW3 mankind decides to survive, it must overcome petty differences and thus starts building a Socialist Utopia, shortly after manking achives FTL travel which brings it to the attention of a passing alien ship who give us new technology and guide our species to a better future.

The series starts 200 years later where earth is part of a galactic federation of multiple planets and species and follows the crew of a space ship that is on a mission for 5 years to explore the frontier of the federation.

The entire ship is crewed by cute teenage girls.

I call the show Starship Yuri.

Boy_vs_Girl
Boy_vs_Girl

@Fried_Sushi
@Firespawn
Sounds like BET's wet dream.

Flameblow
Flameblow

@SomethingNew

See this is the problem with shitty anime. Make the first episode the shit with the child, the second episode the shit with the adults, the third the shit with the queen, and the fourth episode the shit with finding a new home.

Nothing worse then Anime 3 episodes of plot in a season and the rest filler.

Nude_Bikergirl
Nude_Bikergirl

@Flameblow
filler
it's a monster of the week with an overarching plot.

You can't build up a colony of characters in 4 fucking episodes

Nojokur
Nojokur

@Nude_Bikergirl
it's a monster of the week with an overarching plot

Nobody wants that shit

You can't build up a colony of characters in 4 fucking episodes

Yes you can, quick snappy writing, not focusing too much on any one character. Not every character needs a full episode to explore there deep emotional traumer. Give the characters actual personality and they will stand out without needing to dwell on them.

TalkBomber
TalkBomber

@Nojokur
you're too obsessed with it being fast. You need to enjoy the ride

BinaryMan
BinaryMan

A romance series where the MC is turned off the the tsundere's emotional immaturity and ends up with literally anyone else.

Burnblaze
Burnblaze

@Nojokur
It worked with Sailor Moon.

Spamalot
Spamalot

@TurtleCat

Obam-Ai

Barack Obama falls in love with Michelle LaVaughn Robinson.

Unable to confess, he is gifted by a deus ex machina with the girl's phone number. Never minding the strange area code, he immediately calls her, and is overjoyed to find out that she has a crush on him as well.

But, the next day, when he recounts the previous day's confessions to the girl, she only looks at him with a perplexed expression. After some investigation, he finds out that the girl he called is not the same girl he fell in love with. In fact, she doesn't exist in this universe at all. She is the girl's alternate universe counterpart, who has fallen in love with the MC's own AU self.

Another curious thing happened. In the alternate universe, she's the First Lady of President Obama. Obama's AU counterpart became senator then the 44th President of the United States of America, in a world where the World Trade Center was destroyed by planes crashing unto them, George W. Bush became president, and Al-Qaeda exists.

Hijinks ensue as the first lady gives her darkest, most private secrets to a non-presidential Obama not only to help him conquer the heart of her other self, but to turn him into the first black president of his own world. While the two chase their respective loved ones, DRAMA ensues as they begin to fall in love with each other instead and question the NATURE of LOVE.

Supergrass
Supergrass

Cute missiles blowing things up.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BzXfVgYCxWI

farquit
farquit

Final Fantasy threads are my favorite.

LuckyDusty
LuckyDusty

@TurtleCat
Best plot ever.

TechHater
TechHater

FeMC has casual sex with the antagonist in order to get closer to the guy she likes. The antagonist invites her to an orgy where the protagonist is coming. Turns out the protagonist was only there to paint the walls. He watches in disgust as FeMC gets pleasured. He ends up with his tsundere osanajimi classmate while FeMC became the Prime Minister.

BinaryMan
BinaryMan

I remember writing this once:

"A SoL anime with the characters being mixed members of 3 age groups: highschoolers, working adults and retired elderly. Some are family-related, tho most aren't. The anime deals with those people's hardships in life (work, love, life and death...), even speaking about sensible issues like bullying, loneliness, racism. No overblown drama, just life unfolding.
The anime sets up chance encounters between members of those 3 groups as they give pieces of advice regarding how to handle things (newer outlook on life, what life taught them as they did some activities or worked in some domain) setting up slowly some intergenerational friendship."

Methshot
Methshot

@Spamalot
So what was MC!Obama if he wasn't president?

Evilember
Evilember

@TechHater
user, if the focus is on the FeMC, then she's the protagonist.

WebTool
WebTool

@Methshot
A hip weed smoking immigrant from Kenya and anchor baby.

Methshot
Methshot

@viagrandad

MC accidentally creates a cute AI waifu
Show starts, MC is all alone because of his meddling snarky AI waifu, though girl-with-crush still has a crush on him and wingman-who-can't-afford-a-phone still hangs out with him.
NotGoogle announces their attempt at general AI; safety concerns dismissed because the AI is bound by Asimov's Three Laws
NotGoogle activates their AI
Everything goes to shit because muh first law
MC-kun and his unbound wAIfu now have to go save the world
Eventually wAIfu takes over the evil AI, is tempted to take over the world but decides not to because love

Animated by SHAFT.

RavySnake
RavySnake

At this point, shouldn't Keit-ai be its own subgenre of ideas now?

CodeBuns
CodeBuns

Timeskip and Flashback

One day, while the main character is sitting in class bored, he wishes he could just skip to the end of it. His vision fades to white, and there he is, at the end of the period. Even though he was taken to the end of it, he still retains all the knowledge that he would have obtained by listening to it. He tries it out on the way home, willing himself to his front door. He remembers the conversation he had with his friend on the way there; it was the same as he would have said it, and it feels like he did, but it only exists as a memory.

Just like it would in a show or book, it only cuts out the uninteresting bits that are unnecessary to show, and it skips to the parts that feel logical to show in a narrative. His life becomes no work and all play. Before he knew it, he reached graduation. Up on stage, he got tired of standing around, so he used the skip.

This was a terrible choice. He was flung several years into the future, his life passing him by. He was in a boring desk job and married to some girl he hates, and didn't even know other than in his memories he received at this point. After a week, he wishes to go back to happier days, similar to his wish to skip ahead.

At this point, he receives the ability to flashback. He is able to leap back to a time that it would feel logical to revisit or expand upon in a show. The problem is that he can't control whether it is a flashback or timeskip. It all depends on what would feel logical in a narrative.

Slowly but surely, he attempts to inch back to his graduation, but fate seems posed to keep him away from it. He tries to calculate what would be the best time to use his power, like when a timeskip would appear in a television show or book series. As he travels through time--meeting, losing, and forgetting friends and acquaintances--he begins to recognize the importance of keeping ties with people, and how fleeting moments with them can be.

RavySnake
RavySnake

A bifurcated love story that follows two parallel universes. In one, the protagonist is born female, and in another the protagonist is born male. In both universes, the main character is a withdrawn nerd with strange hobbies, who expresses themselves better with words than with speech.

In the female universe, MC resorts to a string of one-night stands after being rejected again and again by the people she cares for. No one shares her interests, no one will appreciate her thoughts, so she'll make do with the people that will appreciate her body. It's only a temporary release from the loneliness. When she finally meets the right person, she has to fight to redeem herself from her slutty past (in his eyes, anyway). Her actions aren't meant to be despicable - just sad and misguided.

The male MC faces similar loneliness, and his tactic is to withdraw from the world. He plays VNs, watches wish-fulfillment shows, and dreams day and night of a perfect, unobtainable woman who can't exist in this world. He's only forced out of his isolation when his father falls ill, and reroutes the son's monthly stability checks into paying for his own medical treatments. As he's forced to take up a shitty minimum wage job to survive, he expands to meet new people - and that includes a new love interest. The major challenge facing him, aside from inexperience, is his resentment that she can't be perfect as the girl he used to dream about. He needs to shed his old fantasies in order to move on and love her fully. He redeems himself not by deleting all his VNs (he keeps playing that shit cause it's fun), but by putting more effort into spending time with her/taking care of her.

Emberfire
Emberfire

@CodeBuns
@RavySnake
Would watch/read both.

TurtleCat
TurtleCat

2015
still saying "shounen-ai"
Term's been out of use in Japan since the 90s. I think you mean "BL".

Nojokur
Nojokur

@TurtleCat
The term was never in use in Japan. It's always been BL. It's an occidental term, like Japanimation.

CodeBuns
CodeBuns

@CodeBuns
That's the plot of the Adam Sandler movie Click

whereismyname
whereismyname

An anime about this.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rLy-AwdCOmI

girlDog
girlDog

Virtual Sky Lanterns.

Stupidasole
Stupidasole

An anime

ABOUT BUMPS

happy_sad
happy_sad

An anime about Pizza.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CJEoASUMZbI

Methshot
Methshot

@viagrandad
There's an anime airing this very season about a reverse trap who has to pretend to be a man and has a harem of gay acting men.

Ignoramus
Ignoramus

@Methshot
That sounds nice.

TechHater
TechHater

@CodeBuns
Ah, but is there an ANIME with that storyline?

Think about it boyo.

Emberfire
Emberfire

My dream series would be one where a feisty, strong, tomboyish geki is the main character, but her pettanko and simialr boyish (but far mroe reserved) best friend is the deuteragonist, and occasionally the focus. Both girls grew up together, and spent their childhoods together. At some point, they went to different middle schools, but ended up attending the same high school together.

During that separation, the genki girl would undergoes a change in focus and develops an ideal she wishes to pursue, and also make her embark on her quest to find extraordinary/impossible things. The mroe reserved, who has known her friend for ages and has excused some her eccentricities, plays along, but serves as the voice of reason (and holds her back from doing stupid shit like molesting othe moe people)

Eventually, best friends finds out that genki girl actually has developed reality warping powers but, she is not aware of them. To make it more difficu,t if she 'was' aware' of them, it would break the fabric of reality. To make matters worse, she's at an age where her hormones are volatile, she can't decide whether she prefers guys or girls (or both). Thus there are times where she falls for a particular guy, or a particular girl, it gets in the way of things. However, unbeknownst to ehr, when she doesn't get her way, and even though she can kee bottling it in, her powers manifest dangers that cause problems for her best friend and her close circle of friends (all who are aware of her powers)

The key foils would be someone like a strong, stoic, athletic type some girls like, who knows when to get shit done. Another is just your average boy next door but, he's very dependable. Then there is that mysterious transfer student who you just don't know whats going in his head.

As the series progresses, it will remain unclear whether both girls will end up with a particular guy, or the series will end with a straight up yuri ending.

Pic related is the inspiration.

Bidwell
Bidwell

Chang Thunderwang is your average loser
a shy, weeb hikki who lives each day with no thought for the next
one day his house is broken into, he is bound and gagged along with his mother and taken to a remote research facility by a mysterious organisation
it turns out Mr Thunderwang has a very specific bloodtype, highly valued in intergalactic trade
Thunderwang is sent on his way to the Ogaxasa bloodletting chambers where he will spend a thousand years in stasis while his plasma is harvested
or so they thought
a freak solar flare knocks out the power on the vessel transporting Chang through space
twenty two years of beta virgin rage unleash with a mighty shout of "REEEEEEEEEE" as Chang uses the confusion to tackle a guard to the ground and disarm him of his weapon
the Ogaxasa have not yet met a being they could not subdue psychically,
yet in Changs psyche all they could derive was a "REEEEEEEEEEEEEE" of cosmic proportions
as such they maintain only rudimentary melee weapons, more ceremonial than anything else
Chang begins to fight a guerilla war within the ship, freeing other prisoners in the process
even some cute human girls
eventually the crew is overwhelmed, and the cult of thunderwang agrees, he has every right to turn the ship home and head for earth
the fellow humans on the ship concur, he must head home for earth
food supplies are running low, it's the logical option
chang says "NO"
"WE HEAD FOR THEIR HOME PLANET"
"ALIEN FUCKING SHITS"
and thus the destruction of the Galactic Empire began

Flameblow
Flameblow

@Emberfire
If its not more obvious what the inspiration is....

I still need to refine the idea, though.

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